Essay type: Opinion (agree / disagree — to what extent)Band 5.5-6.5Stance: Mostly agreeTarget ≈ 280 wordsModel essay: Band 6.5
Student's Edition
Ngô Đức Thảo
MTESOL · Academic Director
Task 2 Topic
Crime rates are likely to fall as advances in technology make preventing and solving crimes easier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
1Task analysis
Item
Detail
Essay type
Opinion (agree / disagree — to what extent)
Main topic
Whether better technology will lead to lower crime because crimes are easier to prevent and solve
Keywords
crime rates · likely to fall · advances in technology · preventing and solving crimes
Task focus
Predict whether technology will make crime rates fall by helping to prevent and solve crimes
Required position
Say clearly how far you agree or disagree and keep the same position in every paragraph
Plain-English meaning
Cameras, DNA tests and computers help police stop and solve crimes. Will this make crime go down?
Hidden trap
The statement is a prediction (are likely to fall). Remember that technology also helps criminals (online fraud, hacking) — a strong answer considers this
Chosen stance
Mostly agree. Surveillance and security technology deter many traditional crimes and modern forensics solve more cases, although cybercrime is a growing exception
Main-idea plan
BP1 → surveillance and security devices deter crime · BP2 → forensic and data tools solve more crimes, which also deters offenders
2Idea generation
Body 1 — Deterring crime before it happens
Surveillance and security devices deter offenders ✓ strongest
Tracking devices make stolen goods easy to find
Street lighting and smart sensors dự phòng
Body 2 — Solving crimes more effectively
Forensic tools and data solve more crimes ✓ strongest
Higher chance of conviction deters crime
Faster communication between police forces dự phòng
✓ strongest = ý dùng trong bài mẫu · dự phòng = ý thay thế, không có trong bài mẫu.
3Skeleton
Introduction
General statement: Technology transformed policing
Paraphrased task: Rewrite: crime will decline thanks to technology
Thesis: Mostly agree, but new crimes appear
Body 1: CCTV, alarms, trackers → offenders deterred
Body 2: DNA, data analysis → more crimes solved → stronger deterrent
Conclusion: Restate the opinion → summarise both reasons → final thought
4Plan & write your paragraphs
How to use: Read the main idea, tap the cue words to add them to the box, then write
your own sentence. Your essay is built automatically at the bottom and saved in this browser.
Introduction(45–60 words)
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Goal: Topic → rewrite the statement → give your opinion.
General statement
Main idea: Technology transformed policing
Starter: Over the last few … ·
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Paraphrased task
Main idea: Rewrite: crime will decline thanks to technology
Starter: Some people predict that … ·
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Thesis
Main idea: Mostly agree, but new crimes appear
Starter: I mostly agree with … ·
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Body Paragraph 1 — Deterring crime before it happens(90–110 words)
0 words
Goal: Reason 1: explain it and give an example.
Topic sentence
Main idea: Powerful deterrent
Starter: The main reason I … ·
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Explanation 1
Main idea: Cameras, alarms, GPS trackers
Starter: Security cameras in public … ·
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Example
Main idea: Tracked cars are not targeted
Starter: For example, a car … ·
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Explanation 2
Main idea: Smart doorbells
Starter: Many people also use … ·
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Link
Main idea: Crimes riskier, less attractive
Starter: Therefore, crimes such as … ·
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Body Paragraph 2 — Solving crimes more effectively(90–110 words)
0 words
Goal: Reason 2: explain it and give an example.
Topic sentence
Main idea: Solve crimes more effectively
Starter: In addition, technology helps … ·
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Explanation 1
Main idea: DNA, phone and card data
Starter: Forensic techniques such as … ·
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Example
Main idea: Old cases solved by DNA
Starter: For instance, some old … ·
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Explanation 2
Main idea: More likely to be caught
Starter: This means that offenders … ·
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Link
Main idea: Fear discourages crime
Starter: As a result, the … ·
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Conclusion(35–50 words)
0 words
Goal: Repeat your opinion, sum up both reasons, final thought. No new ideas!
Restated thesis
Main idea: Mostly agree
Starter: In conclusion, I mostly … ·
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Summary
Main idea: Deter + catch
Starter: Surveillance devices deter offenders … ·
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Final thought
Main idea: Fight rising cybercrime
Starter: However, governments must also … ·
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5Language bank (Band 5.5-6.5)
Mỗi đoạn có bảng collocation riêng. ✓ = có trong bài mẫu · + = cụm mở rộng để học viên tự dùng. 5.5 = nền tảng · 6.5 = nâng band.
Introduction
Collocation
Form
Vietnamese
Band
Bài mẫu
transformed many aspects of
verb phrase
thay đổi nhiều khía cạnh của
6.5
✓
modern life
adj + noun
cuộc sống hiện đại
5.5
✓
police forces
noun + noun
lực lượng cảnh sát
5.5
✓
crime will decline
clause
tội phạm sẽ giảm
6.5
✓
prevent and solve offences
verb phrase
ngăn chặn và phá án
6.5
✓
new kinds of crime
noun phrase
các loại tội phạm mới
5.5
✓
Body Paragraph 1 — Deterring crime before it happens
Collocation
Form
Vietnamese
Band
Bài mẫu
a powerful deterrent
adj + noun
yếu tố răn đe mạnh
6.5
✓
traditional crimes
adj + noun
tội phạm truyền thống
5.5
✓
public places
adj + noun
nơi công cộng
5.5
✓
alarm systems
noun + noun
hệ thống báo động
5.5
✓
a tracking device
noun phrase
thiết bị định vị
6.5
✓
within minutes
prep phrase
trong vài phút
5.5
✓
smart doorbells
adj + noun
chuông cửa thông minh
6.5
✓
burglary and theft
noun phrase
trộm đột nhập và trộm cắp
5.5
✓
riskier and less attractive
adv + adj
rủi ro hơn và kém hấp dẫn hơn
6.5
✓
Body Paragraph 2 — Solving crimes more effectively
Collocation
Form
Vietnamese
Band
Bài mẫu
solve crimes
verb + noun
phá án
5.5
✓
far more effectively
adv + adj
hiệu quả hơn nhiều
6.5
✓
forensic techniques
adj + noun
kỹ thuật pháp y
6.5
✓
DNA analysis
noun + noun
phân tích ADN
6.5
✓
a crime scene
noun + noun
hiện trường vụ án
5.5
✓
matched to a suspect
passive phrase
khớp với nghi phạm
6.5
✓
caught and punished
passive phrase
bị bắt và trừng phạt
5.5
✓
the fear of being caught
noun phrase
nỗi sợ bị bắt
5.5
✓
in the first place
fixed phrase
ngay từ đầu
6.5
✓
Conclusion
Collocation
Form
Vietnamese
Band
Bài mẫu
In conclusion
linker
tóm lại
5.5
✓
crime rates
noun + noun
tỷ lệ tội phạm
5.5
✓
surveillance devices
noun + noun
thiết bị giám sát
6.5
✓
deter offenders
verb + noun
răn đe kẻ phạm tội
6.5
✓
fighting cybercrime
verb + noun
chống tội phạm mạng
6.5
✓
rising quickly
verb + adv
tăng nhanh
5.5
✓
Useful structures
Although + clause, + main clause (concession)
Noun, which + verb …, + main verb (non-defining relative clause)
If + present, + will / can + verb (conditional for results)
This means that + clause (explaining a consequence)
… be + past participle (passive voice for processes and policies)
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